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Milz: IMO, I think it should go more like this: "Whatever doesn't kill me...had better start [shotgun cock] RUNNING!"
Mol: Oh, come on, get the timing right: "Whatever doesn't kill me [shotgun cock] had better start running."
Milz: OK. Ok. I can dig that. What does not convey in my writing is a *pause* for the shotgun cocking. But , yours is cool, too.
Mol: Yours conveyed the pause, but it was in the wrong place. :)
Milz: Funny. Well, then. It's agood thing i don't write stage plays. I would suck at it. LOL
Mol: No worries. It was merely [puts on shades] a bad beat.Comment: Finally, my own bad beat story.
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